Author Topic: Azon Amar  (Read 2874 times)

Mana

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Azon Amar
« on: June 27, 2012, 06:42:04 am »
Well here is my attempt at some fan fiction.

Be gentle!

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Re: Azon Amar
« Reply #1 on: June 27, 2012, 07:07:16 am »
YAY! I enjoyed this so much! Also I probably busted my poor dog's eardrums with the amount of 'squeeing' I did :) I like how you've sort of shown Sicarius' inner thoughts, especially how easy it was for Azon Amar to take him over and the struggle he's going through to get himself back under control. There's a couple of places where you switch between past and present tense but overall I really liked it!

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Re: Azon Amar
« Reply #2 on: June 27, 2012, 07:14:54 am »
yayyyyyyyy!    ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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Re: Azon Amar
« Reply #3 on: June 27, 2012, 07:29:25 am »
YAY! I enjoyed this so much! Also I probably busted my poor dog's eardrums with the amount of 'squeeing' I did :) I like how you've sort of shown Sicarius' inner thoughts, especially how easy it was for Azon Amar to take him over and the struggle he's going through to get himself back under control. There's a couple of places where you switch between past and present tense but overall I really liked it!

PM me about those problem areas and I'll fix them up.

Thanks!

I've been working on that since I started the forum and it took a long time.  (Work, kids, etc... :)  )
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Re: Azon Amar
« Reply #4 on: June 27, 2012, 10:46:23 am »
Gah! That was so adorable. It was very enjoyable to see Sicarius's thoughts behind everything, especially his thoughts of Amaranthe.
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Re: Azon Amar
« Reply #5 on: June 27, 2012, 02:26:53 pm »
LOVED IT. So awesome! And Sicarius... I just wanna hug him!! >w< Great job, Mana! Awesome story!

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Re: Azon Amar
« Reply #6 on: June 27, 2012, 02:30:26 pm »
Wow. weird. Nice job!
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